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The charts below show thge percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

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The pie charts illustrate the
use
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 of
water
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 for three different purposes in six areas of the Earth by percentages.
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, it is clear from the charts that except for North
America
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 and
Europe
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 most of the
water
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used
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 for agricultural purposes. The proportion of
water
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 used domestically is the smallest proportion in all areas except for Africa. To start with except for North
America
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 and
Europe
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 in Central Asia Africa Southeast Asia an insult
America
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 most of the
water
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use
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 for agriculture with 88%, 84%, 81% and 71% respectively. In terms of
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use
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 in industry with 53%
Europe
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 is in the lead and
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 followed by North
America
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 with 48%. In terms of domestic
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 of
water
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, in every part of the
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 the proportion ranges between 7% to 15%.
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, except for North
America
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 and
Europe
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,
water
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 usage in industry ranges from 5% to 12%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words use, water, america, europe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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