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the line graph below shows the main reasons people gave for moving away from particular capital city to countryside. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and do comparisons if relevant.

the line graph below shows the main reasons people gave for moving away from particular capital city to countryside. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and do comparisons if relevant.
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According to
 a survey, which is demonstrated by the
line
 graph below, there were many
people
 who decided to leave
urbun
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urban
 life and
imigrate
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immigrate
emigrate
migrate
 to
countryside
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the countryside
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. The main mentioned reasons
have
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above have
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 been
cost
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the cost
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 of living, traffic, and lifestyle. The blue
line
 depicts a significant reason for choosing rural life, which is
cost
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the cost
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 of living. The
line
is showing
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shows
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 a gradual rise
of
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in
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number
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a number
the number
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 of
people
 who presented
this
 reason. on the bottom part of
line
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the line
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graph
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graph,
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 two lines have been shown, which express the
amount
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number
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 of
people
 who
have
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preferd
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preferred
 rural
beacause
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because
 of traffic and lifestyle. The number of
people
, who left metro areas for traffic, had
climed
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climbed
claimed
 sharply by 2010.
However
, individuals, who granted lifestyle as an adequate reason, rose consistently from 1990 to 2010. To wrap up, there
has
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have
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 been three main reasons for moving from
urbun
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urban
 areas to rural places, between 1990 and 2010.
While
,
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apply
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 all three
reaons
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reasons
 attracted more
people
 every year,
cost
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the cost
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 of living is granted as
highly
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a highly
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 common thing
thatabsobed
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that absorbed
 huge amount of individuals to suburbs.
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