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Imagine you had a disappointing experience at a restaurant and would like to address your concerns. Write a letter to the restaurant manager expressing your dissatisfaction and outlining the issues you encountered.

#restaurant #address #concerns #manager #dissatisfaction
Dear Sir I am writing regarding my problem. I came to dinner here yesterday at
this
 time. The first problem is your
waiters
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 who is so rude. And they do not know anything. The
secod
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second
 thing I would like to draw your attention to is your food and
their
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its
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 quality. Their
tast
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taste
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 is so horrible and
noone
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no one
 can eat
this
.
Also
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 your table and seats are so old. There is all
looks
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 simple. You can not sit on
this
 seat.
Your
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 restaurant have anything
.
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For
example
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 your waiter
do
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 not know how to take people's
order
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 or serve people. And of
course
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 your food's price is
soexpensive
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so expensive
expensive
. Some people do not pay
a
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their bills. In
short
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 I suggest that you replace my money. And I waiting
apologize
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 for your
behave
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. I look forward to hearing from you.
Your
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Yours
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 faithfully Ashurov Sardor
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task achievement
To enhance task response, ensure that you address all parts of the prompt thoroughly. Provide specific details about each issue you encountered, how they affected your experience, and what actions you would like the restaurant to take in order to remedy the situation.
task achievement
Adopt a polite and formal tone suitable for writing to a manager. Refrain from using informal language and maintain respect throughout the letter.
coherence cohesion
Organize your letter logically by introducing each issue in a new paragraph. This helps to structure your points clearly and makes your letter easier to follow.
coherence cohesion
Use an appropriate greeting and closing for a formal letter. 'Dear Manager' or 'Dear Restaurant Manager' followed by a formal sign-off such as 'Yours sincerely' would be suitable.
coherence cohesion
Work on grammar, punctuation, and correct spelling to increase the clarity of your message and maintain a professional tone.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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