In the future, people may no longer be able to pay for things in shops using cash. All payments may have to be made by card or using phones. Do you think this will happen one day? Why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowladge or experience.

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, we will save thousands of trees we must save trees, everyone needs oxygen.

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It is important to address all parts of the task. Ensure that you answer both questions posed in the prompt fully and equally. Expand on your ideas regarding why some might oppose the disappearance of cash.

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Ensure your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Use cohesive devices to link your ideas and paragraphs together effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion

Support your main points with specific examples or explanations to strengthen your argument. Avoid general statements and try to provide more detail and concrete examples from your knowledge or experience.

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Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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