The chart below shows the expenditure of 2 countries on consumer goods in 2010.
The bar chart
ilustrates
the expenditure on consumer goods between two countries, Correct your spelling
illustrates
France
and The United Kingdom
in 2010. The goods is
separated Change the verb form
are
by
five items: Change preposition
into
cars
, computers
, books, perfume
, and cameras
.
Cars
have the bigest
value of expenditure for Change the word
biggest
United
Correct article usage
the United
Kingdom
and France
. On the other hand
, perfume
has the lowest number for
The United Change preposition
in
Kingdom
but for France
, cameras
is
the lowest Change the verb form
are
comodities
.
Correct your spelling
commodities
France
lead in computers
and perfume
compared to The United Kingdom
in 2010. However
, cars
, books, and cameras
is
the leading Change the verb form
are
comodities
for The United Correct your spelling
commodities
Kingdom
. The different
Replace the word
difference
of
sales value for Change preposition
in
cars
and computers
is
slightly different between Change the verb form
are
France
and The United Kingdom
but for cameras
, perfume
and books the gap is very wide.
For cameras
the Add a comma
cameras,
different
Replace the word
difference
for spend
number is about 200,000 pounds for The United Change preposition
in spending
Kingdom
and France
. Furthermore
, computers
has
a small interval with 50,000 bucks for two different countries.Change the verb form
have
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