The chart below shows the expenditure of 2 countries on consumer goods in 2010.

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The bar chart

ilustrates

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illustrates

the expenditure on consumer goods between two countries,

France

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and The United

Kingdom

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in 2010. The goods

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separated

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five items:

cars

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computers

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, books,

perfume

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, and

cameras

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Cars

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have the

bigest

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value of expenditure for

United

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the United

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Kingdom

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and

France

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perfume

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has the lowest number

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The United

Kingdom

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but for

France

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cameras

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the lowest

comodities

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commodities

France

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lead in

computers

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and

perfume

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compared to The United

Kingdom

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in 2010.

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cars

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, books, and

cameras

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the leading

comodities

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commodities

for The United

Kingdom

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. The

different

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difference

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sales value for

cars

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and

computers

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slightly different between

France

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and The United

Kingdom

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but for

cameras

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perfume

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and books the gap is very wide. For

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cameras

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cameras,

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the

different

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for spend

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in spending

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number is about 200,000 pounds for The United

Kingdom

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and

France

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Furthermore

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computers

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has

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a small interval with 50,000 bucks for two different countries.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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150 words

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