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task1 : the graph compares the percentage of international and the percentage of Uk students gaining second class degrees or better at a majoy UK university. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

task1 : the graph compares the percentage of international and the percentage of Uk students gaining second class degrees or better at a majoy UK university. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The bar chart shows the percentage of international and
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UK
students
 gaining
second class
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 degrees or better at a major
UK
 university in 2009 The results show that both
UK
 and international
students
 scored above 50 per cent in all subjects except international law, which was scored by
UK
students
 in 2009. International
students
 liked to do better than
UK
students
 in technology subjects .
This
 was particularly true of
information
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 Technology.
Whereas
 over 80
percent
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per cent
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 of international
students
 gained a good degree
information
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 technology, only about half of the
UK
students
 did so Degree results were similar for the two groups in Nursing and Accounting. In Arts and science subjects,
UK
students
 tended to do better. The
humours
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 gap in performance was in
international
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International
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 Law, where
had
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75
percent
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per cent
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 of
UK
students
 gained a
second class
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second-class
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 degree or better. In opposite, fewer than half of the international
students
 attained
this
 level.
Overall
, the bar chart suggests that international and
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UK
students
 had different strengths when studying for degrees in
this
UK
 university
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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