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The popularity of online education has grown significantly in recen years Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

#popularity #education #recen #years #development
It is certainly true that the popularity of online education has grown significantly in recent years. I think
this
 is
positive
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 development, because
must
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one must
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 not come to school. On the one hand, there are clear
ergements
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arguments
elements
 that
bringing
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 the distance
clear
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. One of the main reasons can be that it will be convenient for you to
study
 abroad.
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,
you
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if you
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 want to
study
 abroad,
and
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apply
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you can easily
study
 online remotely. Another significant reason can be that you can get answers to your questions as you would like.
This
 is because education
take
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to
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studying time, of the teachers can get answers to your questions.
On the other hand
, I agree with the
veiwpoint
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viewpoint
 that online
study
 is very comfortable.
Firstly
, I
belive
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believe
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 that you can
talking
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talk
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mobile
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a mobile
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 phone with people online.
For instance
, you can not do
other thing
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 during class because you are studying online.
Secondly
,
i
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also
 feel you can eat during class. In conclusion, the popularity of online education has
development
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 significantly in recent years, because
technolgy
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technology
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is development
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development
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developing
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 at the moment.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure the introduction clearly states your position on the topic and presents an overview of the main points to be discussed.
coherence cohesion
Develop a logical structure with clear paragraphs, each focusing on a separate idea, and use cohesive devices to connect ideas effectively.
coherence cohesion
Support your main points with relevant detailed examples and explanations to demonstrate a clear understanding of the topic.
task achievement
Ensure you provide a balanced argument with pros and cons if the question requires discussing both views before reaching a conclusion.
task achievement
Keep the response relevant to the prompt, directly addressing the question of whether the popularity of online education is a positive or negative development.
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Maintain a formal tone appropriate for academic writing and avoid casual language.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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