You have just started a course in a college which has no sports facilities of its own. Write a letter to the manager of the nearest private sports club.

#course #college #sports #facilities #manager #club

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with

sports

facilities

. I have

been

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live

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in a small university town. I have just started a course in a college which has no

sports

comfort of its own. When I arrived, the

sport

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club

had many problems, the air conditioning was not working and

club

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the club

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has

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had

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no other

sports

facilities

. The first thing I would like to draw your attention

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to is

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sports

facilities

. I am

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interested in

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interesting

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many

type

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sports

.I want to play table tennis where

private

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sports

club

has more

sports

facilities

In addition

this

, I want to take weight training classes why keeping fit.

Also

, table tennis and

other type

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another type

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sports

important part of

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my life. I would be

greatful

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grateful

If you could

description about

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your

sports

club

and say about costs, members

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on. I must

apologies

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for taking up your valuable time with

this

matter. I look forward to receiving your reply as soon as possible.

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Yours

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Your

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faithfully, Po‘latova Parizoda.

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coherence cohesion

Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea. For example, one paragraph can introduce your situation, another can discuss the specifics of what you are looking for in the sports club, and another can request information on membership details and costs.

coherence cohesion

Make logical connections between your sentences and paragraphs. Use linking words effectively to guide the reader through your arguments and requests.

task achievement

Address all parts of the task. In this case, make sure to include specific requests or questions about the facilities and membership of the sports club.

task achievement

Maintain a consistently polite and semi-formal tone appropriate for writing to a manager. Avoid informal language and ensure that you use formal expressions of request and inquiry.

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

170 words

4.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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You have just started a course in a college which has no sports facilities of its own. Write a letter to the manager of the nearest private sports club.

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign languge can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. SOme people consider it a good idea, but some people oppose it. Discuss both views and give your opinion