You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. Write a letter to the restaurant to thank them. Mention the food, service and the atmosphere. Also, suggest any improvements to make things better.

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
letter to show my gratitude towards the services that I received yesterday from your prestige restaurant on my birthday occasion. First of all , all your employees are super professional and work ethically , they know how to treat their customers with love and affection which reflects their professionalism .
In addition
,
food
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was very delicious ,
flavourful
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and flavourful
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and
presentation
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the presentation
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was on another level
hence
, I liked karahi paneen and cheese chilli with butter naan . These dishes became my favourite because I liked the aroma .
Moreover
, the
embience
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audience
in your restaurant was amazing and spectacular
also
background music added magic
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our
over all
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experience. I just have one suggestion as
this
restaurant is so popular and many people are visiting
everyday
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this
way you should have
online
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an online
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payment system which will help your workers save time and energy. I am looking forward to hearing from you . Yours faithfully, Sam
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a clear main idea and that ideas are not mixed within paragraphs. Separate suggestions into their own paragraph for clarity.
Coherence & Cohesion
Craft a stronger opening and closing for your letter. Address the restaurant manager with their name or title if known, and conclude with a more personalized closing remark.
Task Response
Expand on the aspects you enjoyed by providing specific examples or personal anecdotes to illustrate your satisfaction with the experience.
Task Response
Maintain a consistent and appropriate tone throughout the letter. While the tone is generally suitable, aim for a more formal expression of thanks and ensure suggestions are politely framed.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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