The bar chart on the right shows figures of annual coffee and meat consumption.
The following bar chart describes the annual consumption of coffee and
meat
amongst three European countries
, three Asian
countries
and the only American country, the USA. The variables involved in this
double bar chart are the country and kg per person for both food
. Change to a plural noun
foods
Overall
, it can be illustrated that meat
is by far the most consumed product.
In addition
, the USA meat
consumers are widely attracted to this
product, they eat approximately three time
more than Change to a plural noun
times
Asian
countries
combined. In contrast
, European
population consume in Correct article usage
the European
a
interval from 60 to 90 kg, being surpassed by Change the article
an
American
people.
Correct article usage
the American
However
, European
population Correct article usage
the European
take
Wrong verb form
has taken
the
leadership in Correct article usage
apply
coffee's
consumption. Change noun form
coffee
Nevertheless
, the range of dispersion is close in front of American and Asian
nations. In spite of this
, Asian
countries
show good Kurtosis's
variation because the variance between both factors Change noun form
Kurtosis
are
closer than Change the verb form
is
Change preposition
in others
others
Correct quantifier usage
other
countries
.
To conclude
, meat
as a favourite good is incredibly accepted by most of the First-World nations. Nonetheless
, the coffee is vaguely eaten.Submitted by natalyrau13 on
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