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You live near a university and would like to earn some extra money by renting a room in your apartment to a student. Write a letter to the university housing office. In your letter: ● introduce yourself ● explain why your apartment would be a good living place for a student ● describe the room you have for rent

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inquire about I live near a university and would
like
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 earn some money for my outcome by renting a room in my apartment to a student.
Firstly
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, I live in a
residental
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residential
 area of
busy
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a busy
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 town in
north
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the north
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 of Uzbekistan. It is called Tashkent. There are all of the facilities in my town. One of them is Technology
university
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University
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. It is located near
this
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 university. If one of the
student
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students
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want
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wants
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 to live
my
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in my
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 apartment, welcome to our home.
Second
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 point is that there are all of the things in our accommodation.For
inctanse
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instance
, an air
condition
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, a chair and
e.t.c
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etc
. I would be
gratefull
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grateful
 if you could find a student for my home.
Also
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, if he
want
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 to eat delicious foods, I cook a lot of different foods. In conclusion, I look forward to hearing you as soon as possible. Yours sincerely, Davronbek
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introduction
Make sure to provide a proper introduction to who you are, mentioning your name and some background that makes you relevant to the letter's purpose.
task response
Your letter should directly address the key points in the task, specifically giving more details about why your apartment is suitable for a student and expanding on the features of the room for rent.
structure
Create a clear logical structure by organizing your letter into clear paragraphs, each with a single main idea. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.
tone
Use a more suitable and formal greeting and closing for the letter. Consider the appropriateness of phrases and the overall tone for the recipient.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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