Nowadays young people know less about traditions and culture than in the past. What are the reasons for it? Is this a positive development or a negative development?

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the modern globalization era nowadays, it is commonly observed that young generations have less knowledge about their
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nation's traditions and culture compared to older generations in the past.
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Introduction/Conclusion
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Elaboration
Develop your main points with clear supporting details and examples. Merely stating a point without elaboration does not demonstrate an ability to analyze or discuss concepts.
Completeness
Make sure you complete the task by fully responding to all parts of the prompt, including the reasons for the cultural knowledge gap and discussing its implications as being either positive or negative.
Cohesion
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Globalization
  • Digital platforms
  • Modernity
  • Educational priorities
  • Marketable skills
  • Cultural identity
  • Social cohesion
  • Ethnocentrism
  • Cultural extinction
  • Traditional practices
  • Interconnected world
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