Some people think that the best way to stay fit is to join a gym/health club while others think doing everyday activities such as walking and climbing stairs is sufficient. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people have the notion that the best way to keep physically fit
you need
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to join a
gym
/ fitness club,
whereas
others prefer to think that daily basis activities like walking up and down stairs
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the best option. It is important to admit that both ideas have their merits. In
this
essay, I will discuss the possible
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reasons
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that support each view, and what
benefit
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benefits
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they bring to their physical fitness. On the one hand, the option to think that the prime way to get fit is to join a
gym
or health
center
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has its advantages for many convincing reasons. Most importantly, if we join
gym
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a gym
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we
had
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a proper schedule to exercise and our body
get
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frank with
pattern
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we follow on
the
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daily basis
for
example
we
had
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a proper diet plan and exercise scheme. The perfect
example
to illustrate
this
is if we join
gym
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a gym
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or well-being
center
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, we
had
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a
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genuine guidance
by
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from
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a trainer or a coach.
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he provided us
different
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with different
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ways on
particular
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day which exercise we have to do.
On the other hand
, despite the argument, other people choose to believe day-to-day
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tasks
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like
stroll
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strolling
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and
go
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up
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down
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stairs
is
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are
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enough it has
also
its upsides for obvious
reason
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reasons
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.
Firstly
, if we do
that
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types of
actives
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activities
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they
also
keep us fit, and they
were
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are
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also
much less
stress
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than
gym
work. A good interoperation for
this
is we had a tendency to do two works together, our housework and body exercises.
Secondly
, it
also
heels
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helps
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to reduce our house workload. The best
example
is our mothers, they always keep fit without
doing
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going
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gym
because they
did
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do
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their household work. In conclusion, each side serves...
However
, It seems to me that
join
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joining
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a
gym
or a healthiness club is a good idea because its
benefit
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benefits
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outweigh its drawbacks on the whole.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cardiovascular health
  • resistance training
  • physical endurance
  • muscle tone
  • caloric expenditure
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • motivational factor
  • fitness regimen
  • holistic health
  • sustainable exercise habit
  • metabolic rate
  • physical exertion
  • exercise consistency
  • health maintenance
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