he bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

he bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph
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the
last
year's rates of world
illiteracy
from several
countries
and gender classification.
Overall
, as we
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from the specific
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gender,
this
bar chart has shown that
female
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are more
illiteracy
than
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males
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in every region. Even though the highest lack of knowledge to read is from South Africa just over 55%.
In addition
, the least of
illiteracy
women among those
countries
is
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Countries
around 2%. Cleary explains that men from
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region are below
illiteracy
than women. From Developed
Countries
, approximately 1% of
male
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was
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. Latin American or Caribbean was 10% for
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males
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and around 12% for
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females
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.
Then
from East Asia or Oceania was just over 8% and 20% for male and female. Despite
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those three, there are another three
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have high rates of inability to read,
such
as Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States, and South Asia.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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