The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age groups in the UK who used the internet everyday from 2003-2006.

The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age groups in the UK who used the internet everyday from 2003-2006.
The given column graph illustrates the
percentage
of adults of different age groups using the
internet
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Internet
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between 2003 and 2006, in
the
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Great Britain. The
over 65s
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over-65s
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had the
least
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lowest
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percentage
of
internet
users. The main users of the
internet
were young adults aged between 16 and 24 years. In 2003 and 2004, they shared the same
percentage
, which was 80%. In 2005,
this
figure increased significantly to 100%
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but decreased slightly to 90% in the next year. We can see from the chart that all the age groups experienced an upward trend as far as their daily use of the
internet
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is concerned. In the 25-44 group, there was a gradual growth in the
percentage
, from 50% to 80%, between 2003 and 2006. There were similar increases for the 45 to
54 year olds
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54-year-olds
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, rising from 60% in 2003 to 80% in 2006. As for the other two groups,
although
the percentages had minor fluctuation, the
overall
trend was upwards.
Overall
, adults between 18 and 44 showed the greatest usage of the
internet
and the users grew with time regardless of their age.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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