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YOU HAVE RECENTLY MOVED INTO NEW FALT. UNFORTUNATELY, YOUR LOST SOME MONEY THE OTHER DAY. AND CANNOT AFFORD TO PAY NEXT MONTH'S RENT WHEN IT IS DUE. WRITE A LETTE TO LANDLORD EXPLAINING THE SITUATION AND THAT YOU WILL PAY AS SSON AS YOUR PARENTS SEND THE MONEY. ALSO MENTION THAT THERE ARE SOME PROBLEMS WITH THE FLAT.

#falt #money #month #rent #lette #landlord #situation #sson #parents
Dear
sir
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Sir
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 or
madam
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Madam
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, My Name is Parth Patel and I am writing to
infrom
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inform
to
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apply
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you that, I moved to your Falt in June 2023. There is located in Vesu,
surat
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Surat
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. I would like to
apologlie
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apologize
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 that I will not be
albe
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able
 to next
month
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month's
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rent
dur
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due
 to some problem. There are many
kind
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kinds
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 of
issue
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issues
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to
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with
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this
 building and
surrounding
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the surrounding
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 area. I am working in Bank and I have
save
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 my
money
 to pay your house
rent
. But some problem my
money
 has
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been loss
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loss
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lost
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 in my closet.I Found everything But
unfortunately
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unfortunately,
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i
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I
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 did not get any
money
.
Also
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Also,
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 there are many
problem
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problems
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 in your Falt.and
builing
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building
 and area. First of all. The lack of the
maindoor
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main door
 of
this
 falt is damage. There are many
thives
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things
thieves
 rooming in
this
 area. I told my parents and I
help
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 them to give me some
money
 for
rent
. They will
tranfer
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transfer
 me
my
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to my
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 Bank Account
in
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on
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 Monday morning. You understand my
situations
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situation
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 and give me some time
for
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to
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 pay your house
rent
 as
sson
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soon
 as possible. Your Faithfully, Parth Patel.
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coherence cohesion
Focus on structuring your letter with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion to enhance the logical flow of your ideas. Use paragraphs effectively to organize your thoughts.
coherence cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices (such as 'Firstly,' 'In addition,' 'Therefore,') to link your ideas together more clearly.
task achievement
Ensure you fully address the task by providing a thorough explanation of your situation, the delay in rent payment, and the issues with the flat, with relevant details as required in the prompt.
task achievement
Work on presenting your ideas clearly and comprehensively. This means using complete sentences, appropriate vocabulary, and a clear progression of ideas throughout the letter.
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Include specific examples to support your claims, such as dates when you expect to receive money from your parents or precise problems with the flat, to make your explanation more convincing.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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