You have joined a new job recently. Write to your friend about your new job. In your letter: Describe the reason for quitting the previous job Show your excitement for a new job and other details Say about salary package
Dear Jessica
How is it going? I feel so
marvelous
Change the spelling
marvellous
due to
my new job
. My job
is extremely pleasant. I am so satisfied joined a new job
. Cause
my old Correct your spelling
Because
job
was horrible and i
was terrified of my boss. He was Change the capitalization
I
remarkably
stubborn and bossy man, Add an article
a remarkably
the remarkably
also
he was paying low wages on
Change preposition
for
a months
. Correct the article-noun agreement
a month
months
Lastly
I decided to go.
One day my neighbour invited her b-day and the party Add a comma
Lastly,
has
a Wrong verb form
had
big
people. Fix the agreement mistake
lot of
Furthermore
I saw one handsome and seriously rich man who wore a Add a comma
Furthermore,
suite
and tie. Correct your spelling
suit
Then
I introduced with
him. He invited Change preposition
to
to
his work. Correct pronoun usage
me to
In
addition
I went Add a comma
addition,
to
there and now I am working Remove the preposition
apply
for
Change preposition
as
secretary
of Add an article
the secretary
boss
. To my mind, he Add an article
the boss
a boss
fall
in love with me Wrong verb form
fell
however
I have no idea.
My new job
is so fascinating job
for me. Cause well-paid and a
lot of friendly people around Add a missing verb
have a
of
me. I am so luckiest girl in the world.
I hope you send me Change preposition
apply
message
when you read my letter. I will wait for you.
Yours sincerely,
BayramoyAdd an article
a message
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coherence cohesion
To improve your score, ensure that your letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Break down your content into organized paragraphs, each focusing on a specific point. Connect your ideas seamlessly for better coherence using linking words and maintaining logical order.
task achievement
Work on using a suitable tone for an informal letter. Employ phrases and expressions that are commonly used in informal writing. Avoid too formal or overly casual language; find a comfortable, friendly middle ground.
task achievement
Pay attention to the specific bullet points in the task. Each should be addressed in a separate paragraph to ensure task achievement. Make sure your reasons for leaving an old job are clear, show explicit excitement for your new job with relevant details, and mention your salary package appropriately.