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Band 4

You have joined a new job recently. Write to your friend about your new job. In your letter: Describe the reason for quitting the previous job Show your excitement for a new job and other details Say about salary package

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Dear Jessica How is it going? I feel so
marvelous
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due to
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 my new
job
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. My
job
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 is extremely pleasant. I am so satisfied joined a new
job
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.
Cause
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Because
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 my old
job
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 was horrible and
i
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I
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 was terrified of my boss. He was
remarkably
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a remarkably
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 stubborn and bossy man,
also
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 he was paying low wages
on
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for
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a months
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a month
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.
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Lastly
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 I decided to go. One day my neighbour invited her b-day and the party
has
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 a
big
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lot of
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 people.
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Furthermore
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 I saw one handsome and seriously rich man who wore a
suite
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suit
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 and tie.
Then
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 I introduced
with
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to
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 him. He invited
to
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me to
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 his work.
In
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addition
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addition,
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 I went
to
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apply
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there and now I am working
for
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as
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secretary
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the secretary
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 of
boss
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the boss
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. To my mind, he
fall
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fell
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 in love with me
however
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 I have no idea. My new
job
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 is so fascinating
job
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 for me. Cause well-paid and
a
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have a
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lot of friendly people around
of
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apply
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me. I am so luckiest girl in the world. I hope you send me
message
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 when you read my letter. I will wait for you. Yours sincerely, Bayramoy

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coherence cohesion
To improve your score, ensure that your letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Break down your content into organized paragraphs, each focusing on a specific point. Connect your ideas seamlessly for better coherence using linking words and maintaining logical order.
task achievement
Work on using a suitable tone for an informal letter. Employ phrases and expressions that are commonly used in informal writing. Avoid too formal or overly casual language; find a comfortable, friendly middle ground.
task achievement
Pay attention to the specific bullet points in the task. Each should be addressed in a separate paragraph to ensure task achievement. Make sure your reasons for leaving an old job are clear, show explicit excitement for your new job with relevant details, and mention your salary package appropriately.
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