As global trade increase, many goods including those we use in daily basis are produced in another country and have to be transport long distance. Do benefit of this trend outweigh disadvantages?
As global trade is on the rise nowadays, a large number of products including those we utilise
in
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on
daily
basis are made in another Add an article
a daily
country
and need to be exported by hundreds of miles. Indeed, everything comes with a price. However
, despite the drawbacks it brings about, this
movement has positively made great impacts in
society.
The global trade has advantages to offer. Change preposition
on
First,
it supplies people's basic need
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needs
such
as healthy food like vegetables. Evidently, a country
like America does not grow enough vegetables and fruits so that
it has to import them from another Correct word choice
apply
country
, such
as Correct article usage
the Philipine
Philipine
. Correct your spelling
Philippines
Secondly
, international
market is a great means which supports countries' diplomacy. Add an article
the international
This
means that countries who
are diplomatically connected by trading purposes will have a tendency to create a better relationship in the coming days.
Correct pronoun usage
that
However
, there are disadvantages of
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to
this
. One of them is the carbon emission which is left from transporting goods by planes. Taking Russia as an example, this
country
has limited the use of cargo planes to reduce the hazardous waste that thrown
into the air. Other than that, transporting long Add a missing verb
is thrown
distance
most likely increases the cost of the product. Fix the agreement mistake
distances
For instance
, companies must spend high transport expenditure
and pay taxes Fix the agreement mistake
expenditures
everytime
the products are shipped to different nations.
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every time
To sum up
, international
market helps people across the globe fulfil their Add an article
the international
need
and create Fix the agreement mistake
needs
bonding
between countries. Fix the agreement mistake
bonds
However
, this
type of trading can be environmentally harmful and makes goods cost higher. Therefore
, I opine that with the government making policies to combat the possible issues, the advantages of this
movement should outweigh the disadvantages.Submitted by narawriteshare9 on
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