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the chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in the Austrillian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

the chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in the Austrillian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph displays the
informa3on
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information
 which it is reached from a survey about people’s
habitude
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habits
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 of purchasing and using
two
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 caffeinated
drink
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drinks
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,
coffe
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coffee
 and
tea
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, in
five
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city
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cities
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 in Australia.
Overall
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,it can be seen that the
percentage
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 of
people’s
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people
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 using and purchasing
instant
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coffee
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 is more than fresh kinds in all
five
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 ci3es so using fresh
coffee
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 is the least popular
way
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between
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among
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 people in all
five
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 ci3es .
By
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contrast
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contrast,
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 the most popular
way
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 to
using
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use
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 coffeeThe bar graph indicates
informa3on
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information
 which it is reached from a survey about a comparison of the ways people purchase and drink
two
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 caffeinated drinks ,
coffee
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 and
tea
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, in
five
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 ci3es in Australia in
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last
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the last
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 four weeks.
Overall
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,it can be seen that the
percentage
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 of
people’s
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people
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 using and purchasing
instant
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coffee
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 is more than fresh kinds in all
five
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ci3es
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categories
.
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While using
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Using
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 fresh
coffee
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 is not as popular as
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two
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the two
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 other items and it is the least popular
way
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between
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among
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 people . The most popular
way
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 to
using
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use
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coffee
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 and
tea
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 is going to a café in all
ci3es
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cities
,except
Adelaide
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that
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where
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 the
percentage
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 of using
instant
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coffee
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 is a
liEle
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little
 more than drinking out . Regarding the amount of fresh
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coffee’s
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coffee
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consump3on
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consumption
 in
five
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 Australian ci3es ,Sydney is
on
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at
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 the top of the list with an average of around 44
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percent
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per cent
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.
Melborn
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Melbourne
 is in
the
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apply
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second
place
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 with an average of around 43
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percent
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per cent
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that
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apply
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this
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 number is close to
sydney’s
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Sydney’s
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percentage
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.The amount of fresh
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coffee’s
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coffee
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consump3on
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consumption
 in Brisbane is as popular as its
consump3on
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consumption
 in
Adelaide
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 ,it is just under 35
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percent
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per cent
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 in these
two
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 ci3es so these are
in
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at
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 the
boEom
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bottom
 of the list.
this
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 amount for Hobart is around 38
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percent
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per cent
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. As
it
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apply
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men3oned
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mentioned
 in all
ci3es
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countries
instant
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coffee
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 is more popular than fresh
coffee
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.Hobart comes top of the list in using
instant
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coffee
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 with an average of around 54
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percent
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per cent
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,
while
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 Brisbane with a slight difference with an average of around 53
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percent
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per cent
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 is in second
place
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.
Adelaide
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 with 50
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percent
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per cent
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 ,
Melborne
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Melbourne
 with around 48
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percent
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per cent
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 and Sydney with just over 45
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percent
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per cent
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 are placed in third,
forth
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fourth
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 and
last
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place
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respec3vely
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respectively
. As
men3oned
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mentioned
,if we look at the graph
it is clear that
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 going to a café
for having
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to have
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a
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apply
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tea
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 or
coffee
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 is the most popular
way
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compare
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compared
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 to buying fresh and
instant
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coffee
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.
Melborn
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Melbourne
 and Hobart with just under 65
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percent
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per cent
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 are
on
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in
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the
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apply
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first
place
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 .Sydney comes next with just over 60
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percent
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per cent
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.in
the
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apply
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third
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place
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place,
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 Brisbane is seen with an average
around
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of around
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 55
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percent
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per cent
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.And in
last
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place
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place,
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Adelaide
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 comes with just over 50
percent
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,
compare
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compared
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 to using
instant
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coffee
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 , it is clear drinking in
café
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a café
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 is not as popular as buying
instant
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coffee
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 in
Adelaide
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 ,it is an
exep3on
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example
 that drinking out is less popular than using
instant
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coffee
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 in
Adelaide
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 compare to other ci3es.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, overall, while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words two, tea, five, percentage, instant, coffee, ci, es, way, adelaide, percent, place with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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