the chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in the Austrillian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

the chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in the Austrillian cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph displays the
informa3on
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information
which it is reached from a survey about people’s
habitude
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habits
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of purchasing and using
two
caffeinated
drink
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drinks
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,
coffe
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coffee
and
tea
, in
five
city
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cities
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in Australia.
Overall
,it can be seen that the
percentage
of
people’s
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people
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using and purchasing
instant
coffee
is more than fresh kinds in all
five
ci3es so using fresh
coffee
is the least popular
way
between
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among
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people in all
five
ci3es .
By
contrast
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contrast,
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the most popular
way
to
using
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use
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coffeeThe bar graph indicates
informa3on
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information
which it is reached from a survey about a comparison of the ways people purchase and drink
two
caffeinated drinks ,
coffee
and
tea
, in
five
ci3es in Australia in
last
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the last
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four weeks.
Overall
,it can be seen that the
percentage
of
people’s
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people
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using and purchasing
instant
coffee
is more than fresh kinds in all
five
ci3es
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categories
.
While using
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Using
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fresh
coffee
is not as popular as
two
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the two
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other items and it is the least popular
way
between
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among
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people . The most popular
way
to
using
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use
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coffee
and
tea
is going to a café in all
ci3es
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cities
,except
Adelaide
that
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where
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the
percentage
of using
instant
coffee
is a
liEle
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little
more than drinking out . Regarding the amount of fresh
coffee’s
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coffee
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consump3on
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consumption
in
five
Australian ci3es ,Sydney is
on
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at
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the top of the list with an average of around 44
percent
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per cent
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.
Melborn
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Melbourne
is in
the
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apply
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second
place
with an average of around 43
percent
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per cent
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that
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apply
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this
number is close to
sydney’s
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Sydney’s
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percentage
.The amount of fresh
coffee’s
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coffee
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consump3on
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consumption
in Brisbane is as popular as its
consump3on
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consumption
in
Adelaide
,it is just under 35
percent
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per cent
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in these
two
ci3es so these are
in
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at
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the
boEom
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bottom
of the list.
this
amount for Hobart is around 38
percent
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per cent
show examples
. As
it
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apply
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men3oned
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mentioned
in all
ci3es
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countries
instant
coffee
is more popular than fresh
coffee
.Hobart comes top of the list in using
instant
coffee
with an average of around 54
percent
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per cent
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,
while
Brisbane with a slight difference with an average of around 53
percent
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per cent
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is in second
place
.
Adelaide
with 50
percent
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per cent
show examples
,
Melborne
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Melbourne
with around 48
percent
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per cent
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and Sydney with just over 45
percent
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per cent
show examples
are placed in third,
forth
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fourth
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and
last
place
respec3vely
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respectively
. As
men3oned
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mentioned
,if we look at the graph
it is clear that
going to a café
for having
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to have
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a
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apply
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tea
or
coffee
is the most popular
way
compare
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compared
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to buying fresh and
instant
coffee
.
Melborn
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Melbourne
and Hobart with just under 65
percent
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per cent
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are
on
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in
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the
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apply
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first
place
.Sydney comes next with just over 60
percent
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per cent
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.in
the
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apply
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third
place
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place,
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Brisbane is seen with an average
around
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of around
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55
percent
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per cent
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.And in
last
place
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place,
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Adelaide
comes with just over 50
percent
,
compare
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compared
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to using
instant
coffee
, it is clear drinking in
café
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a café
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is not as popular as buying
instant
coffee
in
Adelaide
,it is an
exep3on
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example
that drinking out is less popular than using
instant
coffee
in
Adelaide
compare to other ci3es.
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