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The chart below shows the numbers of three types of visitors to a museum between 1997 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the numbers of three types of visitors to a museum between 1997 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart displays information about
diffrent
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different
 types of
visitors
for
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to
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 a museum from 1997 to 2012.
Overall
,
adult's
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adult
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 numbers have fluctuated in
period
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a period
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 of 15 years and have stayed the highest among other
visitors
.
Nonetheless
, numbers for
visitors
 ages under 15 have decreased steadily unlike viewers with special
need
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needs
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 which have increased rapidly and stayed the lowest at all times.And total
visitors
 number in general have went up. Based on
pieces
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the pieces
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 of information given , the
adults
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number of adults
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 went from 300,100 in 1997 to more
then
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than
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 32
thousands
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thousand
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 of
visitors
 in 2002.
Furthermore
,in 2007 ,
number
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a number
the number
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 of grown-ups who
have
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apply
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went to
this
 museum
hits
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hit
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 a new
all time
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all-time
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 high at above 400
thousands
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thousand
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of
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apply
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viewers.
Nevertheless
, it
decreases
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decreased
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 to 380,000 in 2012.
Moreover
, people aged under 15 started
120,000
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at 120,000
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 in 1997 which went at 110 and 87
thousands
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thousand
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 in 2002 and 2007.
Nevertheless
 , the downtrend
continues
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continued
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 in 2012 with getting a little more than 82,000.
However
, Special Exhibition customers started at 28,000 in 1997 with
a
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an
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 uptrend in the next years with more than 29 and 37
thousands
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thousand
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 in 2002 and 2007. At
last
 , it
hits
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hit
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 42,000 in 2012.
Finally
, total
visitors
 were 448,000 in 1997 and
hits
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hit
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 the new
all time
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all-time
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 high
at
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in
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 2007 with 525, 000 and ended with 504,000
at
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in
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 2012.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "nevertheless".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, thousands with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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