The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in

Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The bar charts depict
amount
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the amount
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of money
people
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spent on junk food in
United
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the United
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Kingdom
by
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apply
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surveyed in 1990 by income categories,
while
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the line charts illustrate the proportion
consumption
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of consumption
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of fast food by consumers during
the
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apply
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1970-1990. By and large,
hamburgers
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show
rapidly
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rapid
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development among the menus.
First,
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most
people
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with more salary prefer to eat
hamburger
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hamburgers
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as the weekly menu which
counted
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counts
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a hefty 45 pence for each
individuals
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individual
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. Compared to
people
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with the standard check amount, it
showing
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shows
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the same trend that
people
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really
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are really
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into
the
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apply
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hamburgers
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.
While
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the lower one,
prefer
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prefers
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to consume fish and chips as daily consume than
hamburgers
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and pizza.
In addition
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, fish and chips
have
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are
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slightly different
with
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from
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hamburgers
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in low salary parts.
Furthermore
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,
hamburgers
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and pizza
showing
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showed
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the same increase
development
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in development
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during the surveys in 20 years. Hamburger increasing decline which
take
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takes
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up to 500 grammes in 1990.
Moreover
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, fish and chips show
the
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a
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declining line during the survey since
in
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apply
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1975.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, hamburgers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Expenditure
  • Fast food
  • Income groups
  • High-income
  • Low-income
  • Medium-income
  • Hamburgers
  • Fried chicken
  • Fish & chips
  • Consumption
  • Trends
  • Significant increase
  • Decline
  • Popularity
  • Spending patterns
  • Consumption trends
  • Lifestyle
  • Preferences
  • Prices
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