The line graph shows the Population in the state of Oregon by county. Three counties that incresed in population between 1940 and 2000, Columbia, Yamhill and Washington had shown the different increasing.

The line graph shows the Population in the state of Oregon by county. Three counties that incresed in population between 1940 and 2000, Columbia, Yamhill and Washington had shown the

 different increasing.
The line graph illustrates the inhabitants in the state of Oregon by three countries that had climbed in population from 1940 to 2000
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Columbia,
Yamhill
and Washington.
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, it is undeniable that Washington
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the highest population through the years.
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Columbia and
Yamhill
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had
same
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trend which
were
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increaced
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increased
slightly. In 1940, in
Washington
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Washington,
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the individuals started with 75
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up to
aproximatly
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approximately
120 in 1970
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and susequently
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quickly climbed to almost over 240 in 2000.
Yamhill
's population in 1940 was 30
then
increased slightly to 45 in 1970
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90 in 2000. It is similar to
Yamhill
the Columbia began
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25
then
had a moderate rose to almost 35
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had a depict
shaply
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sharply
shapely
increase to 75 in 2000.
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