The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

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The map illustrates the layout of the educational institute in the year 2004 and it is projected to have some changes in the schooling sites in 2024.

overall

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, it can be observed that the most remarkable proposed feature of the academy is the addition of the

school

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and a

car

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park

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However

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, the general structure and main entrance will remain the same.

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with, in 2004,

School

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building

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Building

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1 and

School

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building

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2 were opposite each other , separated by the path.

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, by 2024, it will be linked with a path, and

this

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path will be shrunk as well. Sports field be replaced by an introduction of a

school

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building 3.

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car

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park

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2 will be opened up

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adjacentthe

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school

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building 3 in the Northeast direction.

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, a

curve

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curved

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road will be constructed from the entrance , and join to the

car

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park

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2 .The sports field will be redeveloped across the road in the south of the

school

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building 3.More trees will be planted in the Northeast, near

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apply

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the

car

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park

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, car, park with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

176 words

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The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

Some people think that certain old buildings are more worth preserving than other ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think news has no connection to people’s lives, so it is a waste of time to read news in the newspaper and watch news programs on television . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In mordern times, children are spending less time with their families and more time with their friends. 1. Why has this change occured? 2. Do you think parents should force their children to spend more time at home?

easily. In addition, the city is central to the state, trade, education and many sectors of the human being so society tends to find new experiences and broaden their horizon in the metropolitan which supports people’s capability at work.