The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.
The map illustrates the layout of the educational institute in the year 2004 and it is projected to have some changes in the schooling sites in 2024.
overall
, it can be observed that the most remarkable proposed feature of the academy is the addition of the school
and a car
park
.However
, the general structure and main entrance will remain the same.
To begin
with, in 2004, School
building
1 and Capitalize word
Building
School
building
2 were opposite each other , separated by the path.Capitalize word
Building
However
, by 2024, it will be linked with a path, and this
path will be shrunk as well. Sports field be replaced by an introduction of a school
building 3.
Moreover
, car
park
2 will be opened up to
Correct word choice
adjacent to
adjacentthe
Verb problem
apply
school
building 3 in the Northeast direction.Furthermore
, a curve
road will be constructed from the entrance , and join to the Replace the word
curved
car
park
2 .The sports field will be redeveloped across the road in the south of the school
building 3.More trees will be planted in the Northeast, near to
the Change preposition
apply
car
park
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