Governments should ban dangerous sports. Others think that people should have the freedom to do any sport activity. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
Government
should prohibit Correct article usage
The government
ban
risky Verb problem
apply
sports
. This
essay disagree
Change the verb form
disagrees
this
idea because Change preposition
with this
people
can expess
their emotions Correct your spelling
express
also
it can be harmful for
their health.
Change the preposition
to
Government
should ban dangerous Correct article usage
The government
sports
because some sports
are harmful to a person's life. Sometimes people
will die after
this
dangerous spots. Doing unsafe Correct determiner usage
these
sports
you can have physically
problems like breaking your leg or arms. Change the adverb
physical
For example
, claiming to high mountain
Fix the agreement mistake
mountains
also
riding motorcycles in high places.
Another reason doing hazardous sports
help
Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
people
let off their steam also
some Rephrase
is that
people
relaxed
claiming high mountains. Wrong verb form
relax
For example
, have
a type of person Unnecessary verb
apply
not
communicate with other Add a missing verb
does not
people
and sometimes this
person wanted
express their bad feelings and emotions to the outside, that’s why they are doing dangerous activities to get rid of bad emotions. Add the particle
wanted to
However
, in most cases
it is dangerous for Add a comma
cases,
people
to engage in extreme sports
.
In conclusion, hazardous sports
damaging
to a human’s life, and it’s Add a missing verb
are damaging
better
way for Add an article
a better
the better
people
get
rid of their lousy Fix the infinitive
to get
problematic
.Replace the word
problems
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task achievement
Make sure to introduce both sides of the argument clearly in your introduction, followed by a thesis statement indicating your personal stance.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear and distinct paragraphs for each main point. Start each paragraph with a topic sentence that explains the main idea you will discuss.
task achievement
Provide specific examples to support each argument you make. This will make your essay more convincing and demonstrate your understanding of the topic.
task achievement
End your essay with a conclusion that summarises both views and restates your opinion. This will provide a clear closure to your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure logical and smooth transitions between sentences and paragraphs. This helps in maintaining the flow of your essay and making it easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Check for grammatical errors and work on improving your sentence structure. This will enhance the overall readability of your essay.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?
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