Write a letter to a museum's manager after visting the museum. Give some advice for improvement as you had a mixed experience.
Dear Manager,
I am writing
this
letter to share my mixed experience with you after visiting the
London's history Correct article usage
apply
museum
. Last
week, I decided to visit this
great museum
with my few close friends. As the website of your museum
has mentioned that
Correct word choice
apply
enterance
is allowed after 9am, Correct your spelling
entrance
we
arrived Correct word choice
and we
on
the ticket counter around 10:00 am. Change preposition
at
However
, the gate keeper
did not allow the entrance till 11 am. Correct your spelling
gatekeeper
Moreover
, the customer service was not satisfactory in the museum
, as there was no tourist guide available for the local community. In my opinion, the opening and closing time
of the Fix the agreement mistake
times
museum
should be same
on both Correct article usage
the same
website
and Correct article usage
the website
Correct article usage
the enterance
enterance
gate of the Correct your spelling
entrance
place
, otherwise
it will harm the reputation of your Add a comma
otherwise,
place
.
Although
, no guide was available for the locals in the area, but
the details encrypted on the historic relics were more than enough to understand the Remove the conjunction
apply
historic
background. Correct word choice
historical
In addition
, we were pleasently
surprised by the cleanliness of the region.
Correct your spelling
pleasantly
Nevertheless
, I want to give some advice for the improvement of the museum
. As this
place
hold
great historical significance, you should improve the security measures for Correct subject-verb agreement
holds
safety
of the Add an article
the safety
place
.
I hope you will consider my advice for the betterment of the museum
.
Thanks.
Regards,
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