Write a letter to a museum's manager after visting the museum. Give some advice for improvement as you had a mixed experience.

Dear Manager, I am writing

this

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letter to share my mixed experience with you after visiting

the

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London's history

museum

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Last

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week, I decided to visit

this

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great

museum

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with my few close friends. As the website of your

museum

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has mentioned

that

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apply

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enterance

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entrance

is allowed after 9am,

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and we

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arrived

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the ticket counter around 10:00 am.

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, the

gate keeper

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gatekeeper

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did not allow the entrance till 11 am.

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, the customer service was not satisfactory in the

museum

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, as there was no tourist guide available for the local community. In my opinion, the opening and closing

time

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times

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of the

museum

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should be

same

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the same

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on both

website

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the website

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and

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the enterance

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enterance

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entrance

gate of the

place

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otherwise

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otherwise,

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it will harm the reputation of your

place

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, no guide was available for the locals in the area,

but

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the details encrypted on the historic relics were more than enough to understand the

historic

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historical

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background.

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, we were

pleasently

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pleasantly

surprised by the cleanliness of the region.

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, I want to give some advice for the improvement of the

museum

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. As

this

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place

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hold

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holds

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great historical significance, you should improve the security measures for

safety

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the safety

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of the

place

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. I hope you will consider my advice for the betterment of the

museum

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. Thanks. Regards, Saba

sb101tahirgul

Feb 12, 2024

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Coherence & Cohesion

Ensure consistent use of tense throughout the letter to maintain clarity.

Task Achievement

Develop your suggestions further with specific examples or ideas to enhance your response.

General Advice

Check for spelling and punctuation errors to improve the overall readability.

Coherence & Cohesion

Consider adding a concluding paragraph to neatly wrap up your letter and reinforce your suggestions.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

209 words

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