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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The table gives information about the amount of
milk
which
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produced per year in
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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,
Australia
, Tanzania and Guatemala, in three different years.
Overall
, what stands out from the table is that
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the Netherland
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Netherland
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Netherlands
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 had the highest amount of
producing
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milk
 in litres in all the given years.
In addition
, all the countries saw a rising trend in the term of 20 years, except for
Australia
 which decreased
at the end
 of the period. In 1990,
Netherlands
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 was the biggest producer of
milk
 with 11,262,000 litres in
year
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 and after that,
Australia
 was the second highest manufacturer with a little difference from
Netherland
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Netherlands
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, among other countries.
While
,
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 there was a slight rise in making
milk
 in
Netherland
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Netherlands
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,
Australia
 witnessed a downward trend and levelled off at 9,165,000 in 2010. Both Tanzania and Guatemala started
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 producing
milk
 lower than 88,000 litres annually
,
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 and experienced a dramatic upward trend to reach 1,55,000 and 84,000, respectively in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual production
  • country comparison
  • decade analysis
  • fluctuations
  • overall trends
  • increasing/decreasing trends
  • peak production
  • relatively higher/lower
  • production volume
  • significant growth/decrease
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