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The graph below show the number of university graduates in canada from 1992 to 2007.

The graph below show the number of university graduates in canada from 1992 to 2007.
#show #university #graduates #canada
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The line chart depicts the quality of graduates in Canada
Since
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From
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 1992 until 2007.
Overall
, the graduates from female in the first period and
grow
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 up in the
last
 period,
while
males
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male
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graduations in
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graduated
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the
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apply
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below
of
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women even though
increase
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increased
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 in the
last
 time.
To begin
 with,
in
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from
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 1992 until 1995 females
experience
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experienced
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 little
increase
 from 100,000 to 105,000
graduation
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graduations
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,
however
in
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from
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 1996 to 2000 back to the first period at 100,000. The
females
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female's
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 graduation
continues
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continued
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 to
increase
 in 2001 and
in
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at
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 the top
of
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apply
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position in 2006 with the
totally
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total
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graduates almost 150,000. Meanwhile, the graduation of females in Canada
experience
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experienced
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 fluctuation,
70,000
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with 70,000
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student
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students
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that graduated
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graduating
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 in
this
 country,
slightly
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which slightly
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increase
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increased
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 in 1995
at
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to
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 75,000. Drop until 2003, and speedy
increase
 in the
last
 moment at 95,000.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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