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the chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016.the table shows the percentage change in each category or exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

the chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016.the table shows the percentage change in each category or exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The bar chart illustrates the worth of one country's exports in different categories
on
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in
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 2015 and 2016.The table presents the data of
percentage
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 change in every category or exports in 2016 that are compared with 2015.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the export
earning
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earnings
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 from the year 2015 to 2016 are peak in petroleum
products
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 and engineering goods.In
similar
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a similar
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 way,the textile industry
have
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had
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the
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a
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 high
percentage
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 change
on
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in
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 values
in
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from
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 2015 to 2016. The Gems and Jewellery
had
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earned 42
billion
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dollars
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 in 2015 and 4
billion
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dollars
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 in 2016.
Then
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 the Agricultural
products
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 have
recieved
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received
 earnings of 31
billion
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dollars
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 in 2015 and 31.5
billion
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dollars
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 in 2016.
Moreover
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,the textile industry
have
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obtain
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obtained
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upto
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up to
 25
billion
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dollars
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 and had a gradual increase in the earnings of 32
billion
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dollars
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 in 2016. The
Petrolreum
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Petroleum
products
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 have a rise
upto
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up to
 3% and Engineering goods have a
percentage
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 of 8.5 in the table.
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, Gems and Jewellery have the only fall in the table of 5.18% compared to the
products
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.Agricultural
products
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 had a slight growth over the period of 2 years.The textile
Industry
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industry
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 have the highest
percentage
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 change in values of 15.24% in the period of 2015 to 2016.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, products, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • trend analysis
  • anomalies
  • percentage change
  • sector analysis
  • global demand
  • domestic production
  • economic conditions
  • technological advancements
  • international regulations
  • economic growth
  • trade relations
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