Some people prefer to take a job working for a small company. Others might choose a large company. Which would you prefer and why? Use specific ideas and examples to support your opinion.

I think watching
television
has both
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,
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positive
and negative.
Normary
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Normally
, I agree that watching
television
has
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effect on families. Especially,
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family has young children. It is
nessesary
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necessary
to check dairy news,
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and weather
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weather
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and weather
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forecasts
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forecast
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from
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television
, but a lot of
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programs contain bad
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content
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contents
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for kids these days. Time is money. Yong people should use their time for more important things
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of watching
television
. For
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example
, They can
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with
famiries
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families
,
friends
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and friends
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,
learning
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something, and so on.
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to say, there are
also
usuful
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useful
, educational,
informable
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and informable
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tv
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programs. Sometimes
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has negative effects, but sometimes it has good effects.
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