Some people prefer to take a job working for a small company. Others might choose a large company. Which would you prefer and why? Use specific ideas and examples to support your opinion.

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I think watching
television
has both
effect
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,
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positive
and negative.
Normary
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Normally
, I agree that watching
television
has
negative
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effect on families. Especially,
the
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since the
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family has young children. It is
nessesary
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necessary
to check dairy news,
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and weather
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weather
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and weather
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forecasts
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forecast
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forecasts
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from
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television
, but a lot of
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TV
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programs contain bad
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content
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contents
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for kids these days. Time is money. Yong people should use their time for more important things
instead
of watching
television
. For
exsample
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example
, They can
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with
famiries
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families
,
friends
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and friends
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,
learning
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something, and so on.
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to say, there are
also
usuful
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useful
, educational,
informable
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and informable
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tv
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programs. Sometimes
tv
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has negative effects, but sometimes it has good effects.
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Task Achievement
This essay doesn't directly answer the given prompt about the preference between working for a small or large company. To improve, ensure you address the specific question asked and provide a clear opinion on the topic.
Task Achievement
Use clear and specific examples to support your opinion. This enhances the credibility of your argument and helps the reader understand your perspective better.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion that explicitly state your opinion and summarize your main points. Including these will enhance the structure and clarity of your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure logical progression of ideas by organizing your essay into paragraphs, each focusing on a specific argument or point. This helps in maintaining a logical flow and makes your essay easier to follow.
General Advice
Pay attention to grammar, punctuation, and accurate vocabulary usage. This will help in clearly conveying your ideas and improving the overall readability of your essay.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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