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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given illustration offers insights into data
of
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on
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 the police
budget
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 for 2 years (2017 and 2018) in one particular area of Britain. The provided table delineates information about the source of the
budget
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 and pie charts illustrate its expenditures for both years. In general, the most evident feature of statistics shows that there was an increase in Local tax payments and a slight decrease in spending on Salary articles.
According to
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 the tables, the biggest proportion of the Police
budget
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 in 2017 was allocated from the National Government with 175.5
million
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 pounds which rose slightly
for
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to
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 about 2
million
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 the following year. Following that,
while
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 Local taxes only comprised 91
million
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 in 2017, next year experienced a substantial growth in tax
payment
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payments
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 reaching 102.3
million
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 in 2018.
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, other sources of
budget
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such
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 as grants estimated
only
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at only
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 38
million
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 with half a
million
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 rise
at the end
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. Following the pie diagrams, the majority of the police expenses accounted for wage payments (75) in 2017,
whereas
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 in 2018
this
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 number dropped
about
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by about
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 6%. After that, buildings and transport remained unchanged within 2 years
with
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at
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 17%,
when
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while
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 expenditures for technology rose slightly from 8% in 2017 to 14% in 2018.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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