A friends of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter Explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday Describe some possible disadvantages
Dear Jessica,
What's up them!
To my mind, you will excellent in a camping
dear
? How about your Add the comma(s)
, dear
holiday
.
Um... my Change the punctuation
?
holiday
was so engaging and memorable for me. Recently, I off to the camp
with my sister. The camp
was so gigantic and interesting. However
, The Camp
has some disadvantages.
Ok
, My dear, Correct your spelling
OK
firstly
you will take useful
things that you need. Correct article usage
the useful
Secondly
, If you have the opportunity to go camp
and please, you better choose Wrong verb form
camping
for
Change preposition
apply
you
that you enjoy. Correct pronoun usage
one
Moreover
, outdoor activities and indoor activities are so extremely vital. Cuz, You will chillax from lively activities and who has an outgoing personality people. It helps you to be more sociable and self-reliant.
Secondly
, when you want to sleep outside and you have no idea. There has
a vast amount of insects. Verb problem
is
For example
, mosquitos. Watch outChange preposition
for
holiday
and safe summer camping. I look forward to hearing about your holiday
when you get back.
Best wishes,
BayramoySubmitted by omondavlat91 on
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Task Achievement
To improve your Task Achievement, ensure that you address all parts of the task directly and clearly. The letter should first explain why camping will be enjoyable and then describe the disadvantages in a structured manner. Try to avoid vague expressions and focus on giving specific advice and detailed explanations.
Coherence and Cohesion
For a better score in Coherence and Cohesion, it's crucial to organize your ideas more logically and link them smoothly. Start with a proper introduction and follow a clear paragraph structure: one idea per paragraph. Use transition words to connect ideas ('Firstly', 'Moreover', 'However') and keep the flow of your letter more natural. Avoid abrupt shifts in topic.
Writing Tone
To maintain a suitable writing tone, it's important to keep a balance between informality and clarity, appropriate for a letter to a friend. While it's alright to use conversational language, ensure that your message remains clear and your word choice is appropriate for the advice you're giving.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite