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The tables below give the distribution of world population in 1950 and 2000,with an estamate of the situation in 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparison where relevent.

The tables below give the distribution of world population in 1950 and 2000,with an estamate of the situation in 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparison where relevent.
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Looking at the table below, it can be seen a piece of information about the world
population
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 and its distribution in 1950 and 2000 years,followed by
the
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 prediction about the future situation in 2050. What is quite noticeable,is that digits have a tendency to grow when it comes to
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 number of people;
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 in 1950 the world
population
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 was 2.5 billion, in 2000 the indicator was 6.0 and it is estimated to rise to 9.0
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 2050.
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 with, the distribution of humanity varied depending on the continent,which is discussed,
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, Asia had the highest proportion in comparison with other parts of the world,which was just under the half of total in 1950 and 60% in 2000.
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, the percentage of people in Oceania was lower than 1 and reached the point of 1 in 2000 with no predictions to increase. Looking more closely, it can be noticed that the
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European
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 had a tendency to decrease dramatically,
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 the percentage of people who lived in Africa rose.
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, in 1950 the digit which illustrates the amount of Europinians was 22%,
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 Africa had more than 2 times lower indicator.
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 ,it is predicted that in 2050 Africa and Europe will reach 20 % and 7% respectively.
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, Latin and North America showed quite a similar pattern with
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 small minority of the
population
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 ,which was not higher than 9%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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