some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local sustoms and behaviour.others disagree anf think that the host country should welcome cultural differences.discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Modern society is becoming a global village in which there are
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boundries
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between trade and communication.Some folks think that
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visitors
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should follow local
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visiting other countries
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assume that the
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should welcome
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differences.I will discuss both views with credible examples in the upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand,
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imposing
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the
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is dangerous for
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community because with the passing of
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the
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will
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the behavior
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they will see which will extinct
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their
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at some point.
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,People from all around
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came
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which
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the extinction of native
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,Some traditions are basically
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humanity which includes dowry,child marriage and more.
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,Travelers
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bring some traditions which can be
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extremely
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country
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their
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of giving free food
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any time of day to Canada which is now very
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beneficial
to homeless humans.
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,when
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establish their
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that
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other individuals to come because of similarities in tradition which can aid in the advancement
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economy
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and infrastructure of that
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. in conclusion,
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and the
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country
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citizens have to learn
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how to adopt each
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cultures which would help them to be
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better human
being
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beings
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.
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,the decline of differences in cultures will heavily contribute
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the development of a global village.
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