he first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

he first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The first
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bar
chart
illustrates the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some
kinds
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kind
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of home task.The second diagram
chart
repersent
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represent
represents
the average
of
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time
each
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for each
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task per day.
Overall
, the first
chart
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provides
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provide
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provides
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the
percentage
of
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men
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man
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men
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and
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women
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woman
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women
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who do
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do
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housework
and the second
chart
show
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the average
time
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of
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males
and
females
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do
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housework
.
Firstly
,the
percentage
of
females
do
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housework
is higher than
males
,But in house repairs and pet care the
percentage
of
males
is
little
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higher than
females
.The
percentage
of
females
cooking is
recored
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recorded
required
to be at the top of the list at over 80 per cent.
Secondly
,The
percentage
is the lowest
housework
also
belongs to women in house repairs below 20 per cent.
Finally
, The average
time
of
man
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men
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do
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housework
is lower than
woman
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women
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but the average of house repairs is higher than
females
.The average
time
do pet care is
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at
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to
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20 minutes.
Through
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Though
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we can see the
percentage
and the average
time
of
males
and
females
to do homework
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, time, percentage, housework, males, females with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 7 times.

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