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The map and chart below show the information for the global willingness to eat insect products and the current price for certain food available on the market place. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map and chart below show the information for the global willingness to eat insect products and the current price for certain food available on the market place. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map and chart below represent the statistics about
world's
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the world's
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willingness
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 to eat
insect
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 food and recent prices for some food available on the marketplace.
Overall
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, it is evident that Asian
countries
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such
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 as China and Thailand have significant percentages
for
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of
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 global
willingness
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 to eat
insect
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 products. To commence with
countries
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 with low preferences for
insect
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 products were Russia,Spain and the UK, which made up 32 % of Russia, 33 % of Spain, and 36% of the UK, respectively.
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Furthermore
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 there are
countries
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 with similar numbers
such
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 as Australia and the USA, which accounted for 32 % and 35%, respectively. When it comes to
countries
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 with opposite trend
such
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 as China,Thailand and Mexico, which comprised 44 % for China, 56 % for Thailand and 71 % for Mexico.
According to
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 the
map
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map,
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 there are tendency
about
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for
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 global
willingness
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 in South America
such
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 as Brazil and Peru, which accounted for 45 % and 56 % , respectively. It may be concluded from the map and chart that
in
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apply
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regions like South America and Asia have
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willingness
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a willingness
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on
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to
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insect
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 products. On
opposite
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the opposite
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 side there are Europe and North America .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words willingness, insect, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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