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You are looking for a full-time job,and recently you saw a job opening in a advertisement. •introduce yourself •explain what sort of jon you would like to do •and say what experience and skills you have.

#job #advertisement #•introduce #•explain #sort #jon #•and #skills
Dear Sir My full name Xudoyberdiyeva Asal.But my mom and my friend called Asil.I am 20 years old. My
favorite
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 hobbies
reading
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book
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 and watching football.At present I am finished
universitet
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university
. I am writing in response to an advertisement which was placed in the
shops
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 window.Please accept
this
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expression
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 of my interest in
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 of
trenslater
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translator
.A copy, of my
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 has been
enclased
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enclosed
 for review .I would like to express my interest in the position of
transleter
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translator
 position at BWS . In the past 3 years,I have worked in 2 companies.I think both of these companies have achieved great success
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me
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I have enough experience to work in
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 really need an
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 worker.Most importantly I am very ,responsible.I never waste my time.I understand the value of time. Yours sincerely Asal
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task response
Ensure the introduction briefly outlines the purpose of the letter and clearly introduces yourself. Mention the specific job opening you saw and where.
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Expand on the type of job you're interested in with more detail. Explain why you're interested in the translator position, mentioning any relevant qualifications or passion for languages.
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Provide specific examples of your experience and skills. Instead of stating you have experience, detail your responsibilities in past roles and how they prepare you for the translator position.
coherence cohesion
Organise your letter into clear paragraphs: an introduction, a body paragraph discussing your interest and suitable job, another detailing your experience and skills, and a conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Double-check your spelling and grammar. Consider using tools or asking a friend to review. Errors can distract from your message.
coherence cohesion
Connect your ideas using linking words (e.g., 'Furthermore', 'In addition to', 'Moreover') to ensure the letter flows well from one point to the next.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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