the diagrams show how house designs differ according to climate

the diagrams show how house designs differ according to climate
The given diagram shows two kinds of
house
designs which
is
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used for cool
weather
and warm
weather
.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the
house
shape, windows, and
the
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materials used differ for each climate. To commence, for cold
weather
, the roof of the
house
should be
high- angled
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. There is a window which
allowed
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the
sun light
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sunlight
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to enter the
house
, so by using of heat storing material inside the
buliding
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building
, the
house
will be kept warm.
Also
, the insulation materials outside the building are used as protection against
the
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heat loss. In
second
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picture for warm climate,
however
, the building has
different
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a different
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shape than that of for cold
weather
.
Firstly
, it is made with two high-angled
roof
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roofs
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to reflect the
sun light
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sunlight
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for
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keep the inside cooler, but the insulation material will be used to protect the
house
against the sun’s heat.
Secondly
, there will be two windows which are openable for nights to exchange the air
of
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inside.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words house, weather with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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