The diagram below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

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The blow diagram

diplays

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displays

the process of making

cement

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and what equipment

are

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used,

next,

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producing concrete aimed at constructing buildings

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with

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cement

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is pictured.

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, it is readily apparent that the final product (concrete) is made of Limestone and Clay,

subsequently

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, water, sand and small stones, called Gravel,

also

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are added.

Firstly

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,Limestone and clay pass the crusher and powder is the result.

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, a mixer is in the way

befor

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before

the powder

will be

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heated in

rotating

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a rotating

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heater,

then

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grinder

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the grinder

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is the final stage and bags are ready to be filled

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with

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cement

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after passing that.

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, in concrete

production

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production,

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it is clear that

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final

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the final

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import which is buildings-concrete

include

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includes

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four different

ingredient

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ingredients

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such

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as water and sand,

their

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percentages are 10% and 25% respectively.

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, the biggest portion of goods is Gravel,

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apply

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accountent

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accountant

50%

while

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the

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apply

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cement

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accupied

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occupied

just 15% of the product. All these materials are added

each

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to each

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other in the concrete mixer.

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12
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

157 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

cement production
concrete formulation
building materials
extraction
raw materials
crushing
mixing
rotating kiln
grinding
packaging
ratios
construction
industry
limestone
clay
sand
gravel
water
concrete mixers
sequential stages

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