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This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.

This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.
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The following graph illustrates the distribution of four different recycled components between 1982 and 2010 in a specific country.
Overall
, all components were increased gradually except for the aluminium cans which witnessed a significant growth among others. In terms of glass containers and paper &
cardboard
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cardboard,
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 both started with more than 45
percents
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percent
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 in 1982. Paper and cardboard as the highest recycled materials went
fluctuative
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fluctuating
 and reached
it's
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peak
 in 1994 before
decreased
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 gradually and
hit
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 70% in 2010. Similar
with
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to
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 paper and cardboard, glass containers
also
 dropped and hit the bottom in 1990 at 40%.
Thus
, it rose moderately and
touch
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the
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peak
 at 60% in 2010. Regarding
another materials
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another material
other materials
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,
alumininium
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aluminium
 cans and plastics
which
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apply
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were used after
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the year
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year
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years
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of
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apply
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1986 and 1990 respectively. Both were started at the same score, less than 10%. Plastics
was witnessing
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witnessed
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 a slight
rising
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rise
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at
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over
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 the
last
 ten years
,
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 and touched
it's
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their
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peak
 at around 9%.
However
,
alumininium
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aluminium
 cans experienced the greatest change among others. It increased dramatically and multiplied
into
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around 8 times,
hit
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hitting
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it's
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its
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peak
at
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in
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 2010 with
score
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a score
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around
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of around
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 45%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words peak with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • increased
  • paper and cardboard
  • plastic
  • glass
  • metal
  • significant increase
  • relatively stable
  • fluctuating
  • period
  • starting
  • reaching
  • gradually increasing
  • remained low
  • experienced
  • showed
  • greatest
  • proportion
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