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The bar chart below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001

The bar chart below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001
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The chart provides information about the amount of time represented in
hours
 each teacher spent on educating in different schools in four different countries in 2001.
Overall
, upper secondary education in each country is the most time-consuming,
while
 primary is the least. In general, in the US the teacher spent more time than in other lands. The amount of
hours
 spent in primary school is approximately the same in each country
such
 as Japan, Spain, Iceland, and the USA, which is around 600
hours
. In the USA there is a significant rise in the number of
hours
 for the lower secondary at the level above 900,
while
 other countries don't show
such
 rapid growth, but still, the teacher spends more
hours
 in the lower secondary than in the primary. There is an increase in
hours
 for upper secondary school everywhere, for Spain and Iceland it's around 900
hours
, for the USA under 1200 and for Japan above 600. Each country shows an upward trend in the number of
hours
.
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