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Write a letter to your manager to nominate a person for the best employee of the year award. Explain in your letter:  Who this person is  Why you choose him/her  What the characteristics of the good employee are

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter regarding a person whom I want to nominate for the
best
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Best Employee
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employee
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 of the
year
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Year
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 award. Tom Smith, the Salesperson who is working
under
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in
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the Maketing
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Maketing
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marketing
 Department, is one of the best
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employee
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employees
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 I ever met. There are
number
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a number
the number
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 of reasons for choosing
this
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 candidate.
Firstly
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, he is responsible in his work,
completes
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and completes
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 the task in
given
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a given
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 time period
moreover
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, he always takes the
feedbacks
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 positively.
Secondly
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, he
train
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trains
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 other new employees and
take
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takes
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their
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them
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 back when needed.
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, he is self-motivated,
that
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which
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 makes him different from all other employees. Some of the characteristics that we should look
in
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for in
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 a good
employee
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 are
punctual
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punctuality
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,
self-motivated
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self-motivation
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,
leardership
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leadership
, responsible communication, willingness to learn and many more.
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According
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In
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 to past 6 to 8 months our company hired many associates, among them the best
employee
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 Is Tom Smith and I highly recommend him for the best
employee
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 award. Thank you for your consideration. Please let me know if you require any
further
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 information. Your's faithfully Steve
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Tone Consistency
In your letter, ensure to maintain a consistent tone throughout. This adds to the professionalism and readability of your message. Although the tone was generally suitable, a slight inconsistency was noted.
Grammar and Punctuation
Check your letter for any grammatical errors or typos to enhance its quality. For instance, 'Marketing Department' instead of 'Maketing Department', 'leadership' instead of 'leardership', and 'Your's faithfully' to 'Yours faithfully.', along with punctuation improvements around commas.
Detailed Examples
Try to provide even more specific examples of the nominee's achievements or contributions. Detailing these instances can strengthen your nomination.
Transitions Between Ideas
Although you have done well to introduce paragraphs that address the letter's directives, pay attention to transitions between ideas for smoother reading. Linking sentences could improve flow and readability.
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