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The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information be selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information be selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparison where relevant.
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Looking at the chart ,information about the difference between the purposes why workers choose cars or bicycles to travel to work. What is noticeable,is that the main reason for cycling is the care about the environment and health conditions,which
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 equally into 30% of each category;
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 driving provides comfort for around half of the people(40%). At
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first glance, it can be obtained that,except
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 mentioned reasons, other purposes for cycling show almost
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 similar pattern.
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 the absence of parking problems is beneficial for 15% of workers, the low time of travelling is considered to be an advantage for 12%.
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, 13 % of people choose bicycles as it does not
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 an extra fee.
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, one-fifth of people agree that cars are beneficial, when the job is far away,
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, only 11% think that vehicles are safer than bikes.
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, an equal proportion is shown when it comes to the speed purposes and demand to carry things to work, which is illustrated in 14% of the total 100%

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