A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer.He/She has asked for your advice Write a letter to your friend.In your letter explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

Dear Sasha The reason why I am writing to you is that I want advice
you
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related
the
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disadvantage
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of some problems,that's to say
road
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the road
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is
further
from here,
such
as hotels,numerous
mountain
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and food,
as well as
suggest some would you like to go camping to make situation better. I have been
go to
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camping, since I am interested
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is
crowded
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place to have some relaxation in summer.Most people
surprised
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when they came to
the
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that place.You eat whatever food or have a shower what do you want time.
This
case
comfortable
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is comfortable
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for everybody.
Although
camping is
crowded
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a crowded
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place and
further
from your city,and
also
mountains
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the mountains
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highest which
scary
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are scary
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to you.
That is
a
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one problem for you face-to-face.
Such
as the distance is 70km,which is long too
many
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humans.
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you
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cars
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broken
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last
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night to drive for
camping
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the camping
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area.I assume that possible to go camping.Another one most people don't
more
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chill out in
this
situation. I don't want to go camping with you.In consequence of my have headache.For that
reason
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you alone go
to
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camping.
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as my legs
broken
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broke
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last
day
play
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playing
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football with
children
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the children
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. I hope you will take all my words into account, and have
pleasant
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vacation. Best regards, Ali
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task achievement
Enhance clarity and address the task more directly by explaining why camping could be enjoyable, discussing disadvantages clearly, and stating your decision about joining in a straightforward manner.
coherence cohesion
Use logical connectors and transitions between sentences and paragraphs to improve the flow of ideas.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph presents a single, clear idea. This will help maintain focus and avoid confusing the reader.
general
Revise grammar and punctuation for better clarity and to maintain a professional and friendly tone throughout the letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventure
  • serenity
  • outdoors
  • refreshing
  • hustle and bustle
  • inherent
  • foster
  • distractions
  • cost-effective
  • unpredictable
  • wildlife
  • adequate preparation
  • physical demands
  • researching
  • campsite
  • lasting memories
  • mutual interests
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