A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer.He/She has asked for your advice Write a letter to your friend.In your letter explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
Dear Sasha
The reason why I am writing to you is that I want advice
you
related Change preposition
from you
the
Change preposition
to the
disadvantage
of some problems,that's to say Fix the agreement mistake
disadvantages
road
is Add an article
the road
further
from here,such
as hotels,numerous mountain
and food,Fix the agreement mistake
mountains
as well as
suggest some would you like to go camping to make situation better.
I have been go to
camping, since I am interested Wrong verb form
going
This
is crowded
place to have some relaxation in summer.Most people Add an article
a crowded
surprised
when they came to Add a missing verb
were surprised
the
that place.You eat whatever food or have a shower what do you want time.Remove the article
apply
This
case comfortable
for everybody.
Add a missing verb
is comfortable
Although
camping is crowded
place and Add an article
a crowded
further
from your city,and also
mountains
highest which Correct article usage
the mountains
scary
to you.Add a missing verb
are scary
That is
a
one problem for you face-to-face.Remove the article
apply
Such
as the distance is 70km,which is long too many
humans.Change preposition
for many
Firstly
you
Correct pronoun usage
your
cars
Fix the agreement mistake
car
broken
Add the auxiliary verb
broke
have broken
last
night to drive for Change preposition
down last
camping
area.I assume that possible to go camping.Another one most people don't Add an article
the camping
more
chill out in Correct quantifier usage
apply
this
situation.
I don't want to go camping with you.In consequence of my have headache.For that reason
you alone go Add a comma
reason,
to
camping.Change preposition
apply
Such
as my legs broken
Wrong verb form
broke
last
day play
football with Wrong verb form
playing
children
.
I hope you will take all my words into account, and have Correct article usage
the children
pleasant
vacation.
Best regards,
AliAdd an article
a pleasant
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task achievement
Enhance clarity and address the task more directly by explaining why camping could be enjoyable, discussing disadvantages clearly, and stating your decision about joining in a straightforward manner.
coherence cohesion
Use logical connectors and transitions between sentences and paragraphs to improve the flow of ideas.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph presents a single, clear idea. This will help maintain focus and avoid confusing the reader.
general
Revise grammar and punctuation for better clarity and to maintain a professional and friendly tone throughout the letter.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite