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The diagram below illustrate how recycled paper is made. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The diagram below illustrate how recycled paper is made. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The given diagram elucidates the recycled paper-making
process
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Overall
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, the total procedure entails four main phases, starting with forming
pulp
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 and culminating with making paper. The
process
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 requires the use of a number of specialised pieces of machinery and substances, including a filter and chemical agents. The most interesting feature that emerges from the
pulp
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-making
process
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 is the main material is actually used paper
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 distributed using a conveyor belt before mixing it with
water
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 and chemical substances. Once it is mixed and turned into
pulp
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, the
pulp
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 must be filtered. Regarding the cleaning
process
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, the filtered
pulp
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 is washed using
water
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, soap, and air. In
this
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process
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, the ink residues are removed. Having been cleaned, the
water
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 and chemicals are added again to ensure
pulp
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 purity.
Lastly
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, the cleaned
pulp
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 is poured into a conveyor belt, and the
water
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 is drained using heated rollers. After the
pulp
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 is dried, it forms a roll of recycled paper.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, pulp, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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