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The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented line chart displays the
number
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 of
visitors
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 who attended three different
museums
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 in London, namely the
British
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Museum
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, the
Science
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Museum
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, and the Natural History
Museum
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, during the summer season of 2013, from June to September. In general, the
British
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Museum
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 had the highest
number
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 of
visitors
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 compared to the other two
museums
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 during the summer of 2013. In June 2013, the
British
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Museum
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 had 600,000
visitors
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,
while
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 the Natural History
Museum
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 had 550,000 and the
Science
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Museum
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 had 400,000
visitors
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. In July 2013, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 to the
British
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Museum
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 and the
Science
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Museum
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 was similar, with both
museums
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 receiving around 350,000
visitors
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.
However
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, the
British
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Museum
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 experienced a surge in
visitors
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 in July, reaching a peak of 750,000
visitors
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.
Additionally
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, the
British
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 and
Science
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Museum
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 had the lowest
number
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 of
visitors
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 in August 2013, with 500,000 and 300,000
visitors
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, respectively.
Moreover
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 to all three
museums
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 increased gradually in September 2013. During
this
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 month, the
British
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Museum
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 had 650,000
visitors
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,
while
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 the
Science
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Museum
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 and the Natural History
Museum
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 had around 450,000
visitors
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 each.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, museums, british, museum, science with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • illustrates
  • number of visitors
  • museums
  • from June to September 2013
  • the British Museum
  • the Natural History Museum
  • the Science Museum
  • overall trend
  • attracted
  • the most visitors
  • fewest visitors
  • peak
  • experienced fluctuations
  • decline
  • highlight
  • dominance
  • consistent decline
  • minor resurgence
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