The three pie charts compare the composition of four different meals, namely breakfast, dinner, lunch and snacks, in terms of three nutrients, namely sodium, saturated fat and added sugar.

The three pie charts compare the composition of four different meals, namely breakfast, dinner, lunch and snacks, in terms of three nutrients, namely sodium, saturated fat and added sugar.
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The three pie charts illustrate the three types of nutrients
such
as sugar,sodium and saturated fat in typical
meals
consumed in the USA with instruments in percentages.
To begin
with,there are 4 categories for
meals
namely
breakfast
, lunch ,
dinner
and
snacks
as above. As seen from the pie charts, Sodium
are
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the most intake at
dinner
with 43%
while
breakfast
and
snacks
with the same figures at 14% each.As for lunch
meals
with 29%.Next,saturated fat and sugar intake in
breakfast
also
are the same with 16% each as mentioned but it appears to be higher in
dinner
with 37% and 23% , respectively.
In contrast
,lower in
snacks
with 21% and 42%,respectively.
Last
but not least,26% and 23% respectively,in lunch type
meals
.
Overall
, consumers tend to take less of all types of nutrients in
breakfast
meals
.
However
,
it is clear that
people
take
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a large amount
in
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sugars
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sugar
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and
sodiums
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sodium
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while
having
a
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dinner
and
snacks
in the USA.
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