the charts give information about two genres of TV programes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia
The bar graph describes how the difference in the preference of TV
programes
depending on gender and age in Australia.
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programmes
programs
Overall
, the rate of the shows that female watches are on a similar trends
in two different genres.
In detail, the percentage of groups watching reality shows indicates an Correct the article-noun agreement
similar trends
a similar trend
upper
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upward
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female
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per cent
male
recorded a twofold decrease Fix the agreement mistake
males
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female
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females
percent
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per cent
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, the number of groups who watch the
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show
appeared nearly twofold increase than reality shows. In the meanwhile, compared with two different genres, Fix the agreement mistake
shows
age
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ages
from
25-34 Change preposition
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as well as
35-44 tend to prefer the
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than
game shows. Change preposition
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, age
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45+ reached a peak in both two graphs.Change preposition
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