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The line graph below shows the household recycling rates in three different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the household recycling rates in three different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph indicates the proportion of
the
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household recycling rates in three different countries from 2005 to 2015.
Overall
,
while
UK
 and
Germany
shows
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show
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 an upward
trends
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trend
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,
France
 shows a fluctuation. In detail, in 2005,
Germany
has
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had
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 the lowest
of
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recycling
rates
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rate
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 by 20
percent
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per cent
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. Following that,
France
 and
UK
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the UK
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 had 35
percent
,
50
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and 50
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percent
 respectively. In the meanwhile, recycling
household
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households
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 in
France
 decreased considerably to 40
percent
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per cent
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,
recycling
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and recycling
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household
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households
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from
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in
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UK
 and
Germany
were
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increased consistently in 2009.
Also
,
residence
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residents
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 from
UK
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the UK
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 and
Germany
 show
sharp
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a sharp
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rose
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rise
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 from 2009 to 2011.
However
, compared with them,
France
 recorded the lowest rate in 2013
to
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at
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 30
percent
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per cent
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.
Finally
,
UK
 and
Germany
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German
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residences
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residents
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 tend to recycle over the decade,
France
 shows an opposite trend by
felling
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fell
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 to 40
percent
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per cent
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 in the
last
 10 years.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, germany, france, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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