YOU WORK FOR AN INTERNATIONAL COMAPNY, AND WOULD LIKE TO SPEND SIX MONTH WORKINGIN ITS HEAD OFFICE IN ANOTHER COUNTRY. WROTE A LETTER TO YOUR MANAGER. IN YOUR LETTER EXPLAIN WHY YOU WANT TO WORK IN THE COMAPNY'S HEAD OFFICE FOE SIX MONTHS, SAY HOW YOUR WORK COULD BE DONE WHILE YOU ARE AWAY, ASK FOR HIS/HER HELP IN ARRANGING IT.
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structure
The letter needs to follow a clearer structure with distinct paragraphs for introduction, body, and conclusion. Start with a greeting to the manager and end with a closing statement.
task response
Focus on directly answering the task's prompt by explaining why you wish to work at the head office, how your work will be managed during your absence, and requesting your manager's assistance.
coherence
Improve coherence by connecting your ideas more logically. Each paragraph should focus on a single aspect of your request (reasons for wanting to move, management of your duties, seeking help).
cohesion
Use paragraphs to separate different ideas for better readability. Currently, the ideas are mixed together, making it difficult to follow.
language proficiency
Revise the letter for grammatical accuracy and appropriate use of vocabulary. Also, ensure that the tone is suitable for a professional request to a manager.
The Greeting
Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.
Always start an informal letter in the ways:
- Dear + name
- Hi / Hello + name
‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.
For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:
- Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.