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The graph below gives information from a2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projectionsuntil 2030. Summarise the information by selecting andreporting the main features, and makecomparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information from a2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projectionsuntil 2030. Summarise the information by selecting andreporting the main features, and makecomparisons where relevant.
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The line graph depicts the data from a 2008 report about energy
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 being consumed by the USA between 1980 and 2030.
Overall
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, the graph illustrates that the first place in consumption was petrol and oil
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 nuclear, solar and hydropower were less consumed in the USA both in 1980 and 2030. It can be seen from the line graph that petrol and oil were eaten by the USA by about 35
quadrillion
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units
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 in 1980 and fluctuated over the period, after that these
units
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 increased gradually approximately to half
at the end
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 of the period. Coal was lower than natural Gas
almost
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 5
quadrillion
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units
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 (15) in the first period,
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, it had significant growth after 50 years and reached approximately 30
quadrillion
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whereas
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 Natural Gas consumed only 30. Nuclear, solar
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wind and hydropower started with a little bit lower than 5
quadrillion
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 together in 1980, but nuclear took the leading position in comparison to other types of energy in 2030.
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, hydropower had the lowest consumption of all energy in
this
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 given list.
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